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Humor: 0
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Sound: 0
Dude this was really bad I'm sorry no offense this gave me a head ache in fact it was not touching it just had very annoying voice that could have been more better in another tone of voice...
The looks of it... this animation was not even planed it was more like some stupid stuff stuck together as you went, it had no creative mind in it... in this i mean you had no clue what you where doing and i think you should make your plot a bit easyer to do
things you should improve
Voice - bit annoying
Pictures - you should not really rush it and post little effort in your pictures just spend some time fiddling around and you will get somewhere.
well anyways it was alright but i wish you to post more to newgrounds and you will improve much better